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I do have to give a critique on this one though. In consideration to the fact that you want Death Chicken to be published with the assumption that the majority of your target audience is American, you have to remember that in a comic format, readers/viewers read things from the left to right, starting from the top and then continuing the process as one gets to the bottom of the page. Pretty much like reading a book, just with visual panels instead of words. Thus, it was initially confusing for me to see the actions of the third panel seen on the top right.
If you're going to get this published, then you really have to fix this problem, because publishers/editors will pretty much tell you the same thing. One of my classmates in high school tried to submit a comic page for an art project in my English class and the teacher called him on that and told him the same thing. So again, you really have to get this fixed. The easiest way to remedy the situation would be to remove the "third"/top right panel altogether.
I'm surprised they're only staring at the movement. You would think they would at least investigate it by following it or something. Still, a nice page!
This was not the first time I've done the boxes this way, BUT your eyes might have been drawn to the right box because the toning up top is a bit dark, making you realize there's not a box inside of a larger box? I'll tone it down and then tell me what you think.
Again, I think it's better just to leave it how it originally was then. This isn't the first time that I had seen something in a different order than most people do, so maybe it's just me. Either way though, your scenes are drawn well enough to tell what the sequential order is, so it was just more of organizing advice if anything. Don't let it get to you.
*fixes it*